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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart depicts the percentage of the population
stay
Wrong verb form
staying
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 in cities in four
countries
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 in Asia between 1970 and 2020, with some expectations for 2030 and 2080. In general, there are four
countries
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 with the main trend
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 increasing. Malaysia has
strong
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a strong
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 rise
while
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 Thailand is a country
has
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that has
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slightly
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a slightly
the slightly
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 stable increase
in
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apply
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every time. We can easily observe from the line graph that Malaysia
has
Verb problem
was
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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dominate
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dominant
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 in 1990 from just around 65% to over 80% in 2020.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 three
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
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countries
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 have slightly and slowly
increase
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increased
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. Especially
Correct article usage
the Philippiens
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Philippiens
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Philippines
 when in 1990 they
have
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had
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highest
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the highest
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percent
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percentage
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 in 4
countries
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 with nearly 50%, but
then
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 in the next 2 years it
has
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had
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 a little decrease
then
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 came back to increase like others.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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