The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant
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, the percentage of people
who were
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Pavilion
went up between 1980 and 1985 then
rocketed between 1985 and 1995. While
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who were
visited the Festival decreased between 1980 and 1985 Unnecessary verb
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then
fluctuated between 1985 and 1995. Another interesting point is that the percentage of people
who used to visit the pier started from less than went up where met around other landmarks.
Looking at the details, people
who where visited the Pavilion
started at just over 20% in 1980 then
rose to at
around 30%, after that jumped to Change preposition
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at
around 50%, between 1995 and 2000 the Change preposition
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number
of people
who visited the Pavilion
plunged to at
just over 30% Change preposition
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then
remained stable at around 30%.
It can be seen that,
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number
of people
who used to visit the Festival started at around 30% then
stayed the same between 1985 and 1995 after that went up where met the number
of people
who visited the Pavilion
. On the other hand
, the number
of visitors who visited the Pier started at 10% in 1980 then
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then
dramatically increased to at
around 23%.Change preposition
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