The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
It is possible to see from
this
bar chart the proportion of people's frequency of buying and drinking tea and
coffee
, in the previous 4 weeks in Australia's five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart).
Overall
,
while
four of the cities' percentage of residents, who were more likely to go to the cafe for drinks, was the highest, the citizens of Adelaide were bit more tend to buy instant
coffee
.
Firstly
, buying fresh caffeine was the smallest proportion in countries.
Moreover
, even the highest rate of users of fresh
coffee
was relatively less than the other two categories' lowests. Brisbane's residents' 34% was the lowest percentage in five countries and the highest amount was 44% in Sydney.
Furthermore
, people who bought instant
coffee
played mainly a moderate proportion, except Adelaide's percentage (50%) which was slightly over the consumers of cafes. Melbourne and Hobart's
percent
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percentage
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of cafe customers was the highest which was 64% of the residents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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