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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
#value #country’s #exports #categories #percentage #change #category #experts
The bar chart above illustrates the value of
exports
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export
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 activity in one country in different categories between 2015 and 2016. The data depicts the change of
persentation
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presentation
 in every
category
 of experts in 2016 compared to 2015.
Overall
, in five categories only in
2015
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2015,
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 the percentage was higher than
2016
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in 2016
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 which was
gems
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the gems
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 and
jewellery's
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jewellery
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category
. In
category
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the category
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 of petroleum products, the country exported 60
billion
 in 2015 and 62
billion
 in 2016.
On the
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The
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 other
category
, which is engineered goods
also
 had
same
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the same
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experienced
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experience
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like
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as
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 before
category
. But,
this
category
have
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has
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 a little bit increased in total billions, which was 3
billion
.
Besides
,
gems
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the gems
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 and
jewellery's
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jewellery
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category
 in 2015 was 42
billion
.
Then
, slightly
decrease
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decreased
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 to 41
billion
.
Next,
there is a
category
 of agricultural products.
This
 kind of
products
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product
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,
successfully
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was successfully
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 exported at 31
billion
 and scantly increased at 32
billion
. The
last
 product,
textile
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textiles
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 has
a
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the
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 same change
like
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as
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 engineered goods which was 3
billion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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