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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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As can be seen, In 1918, there was a significant
percentage
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 of people that lived in rented
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house
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houses
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 which was over 75% or over
three quarter
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 of households. In 1939 and 1953 the
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 of owned accommodation and rented
house
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was remained
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 unchanged roughly 32% and about 67% respectively. In 1971, the
percentage
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 of owned
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house
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houses
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 and rented
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house
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houses
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 was exactly similar at 50% and
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 after 1971 the
percentage
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 of owned
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house
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houses
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was became
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 higher than rented
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house
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 by 2011. In 1981 the
percentage
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 of people who lived
at
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in
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 their own
house
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 was 60% which was 20% higher than households who lived in rented
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house
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houses
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, house with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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