The pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy generated from five different sources, namely Hydropower, Oil, Nuclear power, Coal, Natural gas, in a particular nation between 1983 and 2003.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy generated from five different sources, namely Hydropower, Oil, Nuclear power, Coal, Natural gas, in a particular nation between 1983 and 2003.
This
pie chart shows the
portion
of energy generated from five sources in a certain nation between 1980 and 1990. There are five categories for sources :
Oil
, Natural
gas
, Coal, Hydroelectric
power
,
Nuclear
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and Nuclear
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power
.
Overall
, the percentage of coal and nuclear
power
increased 5% more during the period.
On the other hand
,
oil
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the oil
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and natural
gas
portion
decreased, but particularly the percentage of
oil
declined by 9%, which is
the
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pretty big gap. And the figure
of
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hydropower didn't change. In 1980,
oil
accounted
the
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largest part
among
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of
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five
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the five
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resources and natural
gas
and coal followed next
to
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it
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. In 1990, even though
oil
's figure dropped, it recorded the highest
portion
, and the order of coal and natural
gas
was reversed.
Also
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the
portion
of nuclear
power
rised
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rose
raised
rise
5% more during 10 years. It means as time went by, the usage of environmental energy in
the
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certain state was getting larger.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words portion, oil, gas, power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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