The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The circle graph illustrates the proportion of
energy
supply made in France from 4 different materials in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, France received the most significant amount of
energy
made
up
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from coal, gas and petroleum, which together accounted for more than half of the entire production, whilst nuclear and other kinds of
energy
sources generated the least amount of power. In all types of
energy
production, there were only minimal changes,
besides
petroleum. The
energy
made from petroleum went through a radical decrease of roughly 10% throughout the period, contributing
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only 19.55% in the
last
year.
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produced by coal comprised 29.80% in the first year and showed a slight increase
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approximately 1% in 2005, remaining in
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first place in both years. In 1995, gas generated 29.63%, which rose marginally to 30.31% 10 years later. The country received
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1995 6.40% power from
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increased its
energy
manufacturing by around 4% in 2005. The remaining
energy
sources had
also
gone through a minor rise
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around 3%, respectively.
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