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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The figures depict how the Ryemouth
village
 changes from 1995 to now.
Overall
, the most noticeable
changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
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 is
in
Change preposition
that
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 the northeast of the
village
 is transformed into
sports
Correct article usage
a sports
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area
 that before
is
Wrong verb form
was
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agriculture
Correct article usage
the agriculture
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sectors
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sector
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.
To begin
, by 1995, there was a green
area
consist
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consisting
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 of farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park that
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 several trees and
huge
Correct article usage
a huge
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 land.
In
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This
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this
area
 was transformed into playing
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports areas
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area
such
 as golf to the north, and tennis to the south. The housing was added one house both of the west and east that separate main road of the
village
. In the southwest, the shop was changed to
restaurant
Add an article
the restaurant
a restaurant
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,
although
 was not added.
Subsequently
,
car
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a car
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 park was added beside the hotel and
café
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a café
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 stayed the same in front of the hotel. The fish market was demolished and changed to apartments in the southwest of the
Rymouth
Correct your spelling
Plymouth
.
In addition
, in the west of
village
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the village
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, there are two houses
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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removed. Just
the
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in the
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 south, the fishing port
also
 is removed
in
Change preposition
from
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sea
Correct article usage
the sea
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area
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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