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The provided picture illustrates the process of water movement cycle on,above and below the surface of the Earth.

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The provided picture illustrates the process of
water
 movement cycle on,above and below the surface of the Earth. First of
all
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all,
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 there is evaporation of
water
,mostly oceanic.It is a phase of changing the aggregate condition from liquid to gas.
This
 process forms condensing
water
 vapours,from which all known clouds are formed.About 80% of total
water
 vapour in
air
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the air
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are
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is
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 contributed
be
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by
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ocean
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the ocean
an ocean
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,but
such
 a singular loss
do
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does
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 not impact the reservation of it.Cloud formation is
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a responded
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responded for replenish
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response to the replenishment
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 of spent
water
 by rains,but not directly.Rainfall
water
 feeds soil,lakes and mountains by snow.From
this
,
taken
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the taken
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 resource is reimbursed by
impervious
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an impervious
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 layer that contains groundwater. As
the
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a
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 result,evaporated ocean
water
 does not disappear anywhere,it
is
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apply
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just passes
own
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its own
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 cycle and
come
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comes
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 back from different sources, ensuring well
being
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well-being
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 of
natural
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the natural
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 world in the process.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the stages and details of the water cycle. A clearer structure with distinct paragraphs for each stage can improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use more transitional words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will make the essay easier to follow.
introduction conclusion
Expand the conclusion to summarize more of the key points discussed in the essay.
task achievement
You have a good understanding of the water cycle and its components, which is evident in your description.
introduction conclusion
Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which is important for a cohesive response.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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