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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise t

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise t
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The picture demonstrates each stage of brick manufacturing for the building industry.
Firstly
,clay as the matching material is obtained by
digger
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a digger
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 machine and transported to the workplace.After
that
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that,
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 it is cleaned by
metal
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a metal
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 grid on the roller,
left
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leaving
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 only
needed
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the needed
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 part.Once it is shaped brick form by sand and water in mould and wire cutter it is sent to
drying
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the drying
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 oven
by
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within
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 24-48 hours.Following that,the result is held in
kiln
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the kiln
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on
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at
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 moderate(200°C-980°C) and
than
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then
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 high(870°C-1300°C) temperatures,from which it is moved to
cooling
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a cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours
overall
.The work is almost ready and after packaging it is delivered and exploited. The diagram shows
producing
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the production
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 of an important thing for building and how it
automatised
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is automatised
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.
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