The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the data about people's
spendings
during a week in 1968 and 2018. Fix the agreement mistake
spending
According to
the scheme, it's simple to highlight 8 the most popular categories for spending money, Linking Words
such
as Linking Words
food
, clothes Use synonyms
and
etc. In Correct word choice
apply
this
essay, I would like to present differences betweenLinking Words
2
years, by comparing information about, for what purpose individuals expand their income for a week.
In 1968 the major part of people's income was spent on Correct article usage
the 2
food
(35%), it was the highest percentage, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
least
Correct word choice
lowest
percent
was fuel and power only 7%. Replace the word
percentage
Linking Words
Also
10% of all weekly income was spent on housing and clothing.
Entertainment Add a comma
Also,
wasn't be
really popular too because 8 % of all Change the verb form
wasn't
week
spendings Fix the agreement mistake
weeks
was
spent on it
But in comparison with 2018, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
according to
the data we can see enormous Linking Words
changings
. Replace the word
changes
For instance
, the highest Linking Words
decreasing
was in Replace the word
decrease
Use synonyms
food
category 18%. At the same time the highest Correct article usage
the food
increasing
was in Replace the word
increase
leisure
sphere from 8% to 22%, fuel and power stayed exactly the same like Correct article usage
the leisure
household
category
Correct article usage
the household
To sum up
, I can say that the most popular field in 1968 was Linking Words
food
35% and one of the least popular Use synonyms
sphere
was entertainment 8%. Change to a plural noun
spheres
However
in Linking Words
2018
all data were changed, and in Add a comma
2018,
this
period of time leisure activities became in great request (23%), Linking Words
while
Linking Words
Use synonyms
food
category lost Correct article usage
the food
their
population and had only 17%Correct pronoun usage
its
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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