The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
amount
of males and females who passed their driving exam in Asian Change the quantifier
number
country
from 1980 to 2010.
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
Overall
, the percentage
of females that passed the exam was the highes
, but the amount of both Correct your spelling
highest
men
and women
increased over entire
period. The lowest Add an article
the entire
percentage
was in men
while
women
had the highest
The highest percentage
of both women
and men
who passed driving
test in 2000, about 70% and just below 50% respectively. Correct article usage
the driving
Furthermore
, the second highet
Correct your spelling
highest
percentage
was in 2010, amount of females who passed the exam dropped to about 65% , while
men
was
at the same level.
In 1990, the Change the verb form
were
percentage
of women
who had certificate
after Correct article usage
a certificate
passed
their driving test was about 50% Change the form of the verb
passing
while
men
below
40%. Add a missing verb
were below
Moreover
, In 1980 the percentage
of women
was around 50
% which was two times higher than men
Correct article usage
the men
that
passed the test which was just below 30%.Correct pronoun usage
who
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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