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The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates three different
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 rates in London in number of
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 between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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,
while
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 armed robbery exhibited a significant decline in
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 rates, assault showed a steady increase and murder remained relatively stable between 2003 and 2012.
Firstly
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, armed robbery was the highest
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 in 2003 with 3,500
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 which peaked at nearly 3,700 in 2004 before dropping significantly from 2005 to 2008 to its lowest number of just above 1,000
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. After that, it experienced a steady increase to 1,5000 in 2009, reaching a fluctuation until the end of the period, having the second highest
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 rate.
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, assault experienced a steady fluctuation between 2003 and 2009, beginning with approximately 2,300 and
then
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 exhibiting a stable variation between over 2,000 to below 2,5000, replacing armed robbery as the most significant
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 in 2006. Afterwards, it showed a steady rise of almost 500 in the next 3 years.
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, murder began having the lowest
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 rate with 500
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 in 2003,
then
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 rising modestly to just above 1,000 in 2005, and dropped to a stable fluctuation of around 500
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 between 2006 and 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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