The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the count of the
films
of different forms that were rented or sold in a shop per year over the period
of a decade.
Overall
, it is clear that
initially
, people preferred rental
option to buying a film. Correct article usage
the rental
However
, after two years, the sales
of films
overtook the hiring attitude. The VHS sales
were diminished and disappeared over the period
. Moreover
, the blu-ray
Change the capitalization
Blu-ray
sales
were initiated from about mid-decade.
At the beginning of the period
, the store was offering more rental services than sales
. In the years, 2002 and 2003, about 180,000 films
were hired which was
decreased over the Unnecessary verb
apply
period
. By the end of the period
, the rental business was minimised and was about one-third of its former fate.
In addition
to hiring, the store also
performed the sales
of films
in the form of VHS, DVD and Blu-ray.
In 2002, VHS sales
(80,000) were high compared to DVD ones(50,000). However
, the business of this
type was reduced over time and was
completely vanished Unnecessary verb
apply
from
2006. Simultaneously, the DVD trade was hiked annually,and at Change preposition
in
lat
, it was augmented by almost four times. Correct your spelling
last
Furthermore
, the other format called, blu-ray films
were
marketed Correct subject-verb agreement
was
from
the year 2007. But, of course, these were the least sold in the store Change preposition
in
throghout
the Correct your spelling
throughout
period
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