You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The process of making carbonated drinks consists of five different stages: Water cleaning, Heating evaporation and carbonation, Mixing, Filtering and filling and Packaging.
During the first stage, raw water is put into the filter and passes through a chemical treatment.
In the second step, the cleaned water is heated, evaporated and
then
carbonated, infusing it with carbon dioxide.
Then
also
, the carbonated drink is poured into the giant mixing gallon to be mixed with Colourings, Syrups and Flavours.
At
the fourth round, the point before packaging is to filter the liquid and fill the bottles and cans that contain it.
When they are put into boxes they will Change preposition
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have
pulled separately.
In the culminating stage, bottles and cans of sodas are placed in boxes and delivered to their destinations like supermarkets, grocery stores, restaurants or other institutions.Verb problem
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