The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Healthcare is one of the most important

topic

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topics

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that everyone always

pay

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pays

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attention

, especially

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to, especially

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some scientists

use

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who use

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their knowledge to create medicine or some solutions for

people

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people's

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lives. Some

people

think that the most essential goal of

science

ought to be

improve

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to improve

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people’s

health. In my opinion, I completely agree with

this

since

scientist

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scientists

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can help more

people

to live so the population will increase

help

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and help

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society

has

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have

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more

worker

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workers

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the amount of

vaccine

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vaccines

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or more new

solution

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solutions

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to deal with diseases can be

find out

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found

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faster.

Firstly

,

the

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apply

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scientist

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scientists

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does

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do

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not need to take

to

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too

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much guest and pressure

in

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on

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others

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other

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issues now since they just need to focus on

create

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creating

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more solutions for

the

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apply

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doctor

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doctors

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and more vaccines for

children

or

deal

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dealing

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with

virus

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viruses

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.

For instance

, in 2020, there

is

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was

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a big disaster by

virus

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a virus

the virus

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named

Covid-19

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COVID-19

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and

this

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the

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disaster

has kill

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killed

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a lot of

people

but

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apply

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what happened if in that time

science

can

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had

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focus

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focused

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more or

add

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added

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more

group

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groups

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of

science

to help each other

to

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apply

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find

out

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apply

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vaccine

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vaccines

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faster

.

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?

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Moreover

have

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having

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more

vaccine

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vaccines

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and better medicine is a good sign for everybody, especially

children

with strong

vaccine

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vaccines

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, they can deal with or avoid

sick

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sickness

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when they just born.

Secondly

, as we have more

solution

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solutions

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and facilities,

medicines

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and medicines

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to deal with disease now

so

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apply

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the

dead

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death

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rate will decrease and the population will

be

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increase. Whenever a doctor

save

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saves

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a person it means that

the

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apply

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society

just

have

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has

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got 1 more worker. The same

as

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apply

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scientist

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scientists

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when they find out new things to deal with bad

situation

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situations

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in

people’s

live

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lives

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they

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apply

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can help

children

and adults avoid

sick

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sickness and

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even kill the virus.

This

will help

society

have

worker

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workers

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and

also

help the

economic

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economy

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better.

Thus

, the main goal of

science

is for

people’s

health. In conclusion, for a better

society

with more workforce and

help

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to help

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people

especially

children

avoid disease and deal with

sick

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sickness

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better,

science

should focus on

improve

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improving

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people’s

lives.