The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Townsend in two years 1960 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The presented pie charts compare data about the proportion of people who worked in 3 various items in 2 different Towns in two varied years( 1960 and 2010).

Overall

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, it is crucial that most of the people in

town

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B in two years worked in manufacturing

also

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, in the first year

town

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A had the same trend as

town

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B, but in the second year

Services

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could catch on the biggest section.

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the

town

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A diagrams, in 1960, most of the people who lived in city A chose manufacture for work because it had 41%;

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, the percentage of Sales was nearly the same as

Services

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at 30%;

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, in 2010,

services

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35% climbed;

however

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, both productions and Salses respectively 21 and14 per cent reduced. The plots of

Town

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B demonstrate the main job that had a lot of proportion was manufacturing by 70%;

then

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Sales had 20% and the number of

Services

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was half of the

last

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item.

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, the first one like

town

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A had a 12% decrease;

nevertheless

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services

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and sales had a 2 and 15 per cent increase.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

185 words

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