The bar chart details the percentage of internet users according to nation and the pie chart delineates how much individuals from those same countries spent on average shopping online.

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Jul 19, 2024

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Some people say that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

In most cities and towns, the high volumes of road traffic become a problem. What are the causes of that and what actions could be taken to solve the problem?

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