The bar chart details the percentage of internet users according to nation and the pie chart delineates how much individuals from those same countries spent on average shopping online.

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The bar chart details the percentage of internet users according to nation and the pie chart delineates how much individuals from those same countries spent on average shopping online.

The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with the sentence?

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages

Some people think that the government should spend money on treating ill people, while others believe that a better way is to invest in developing the country.