The bar chart details the percentage of internet users according to nation and the pie chart delineates how much individuals from those same countries spent on average shopping online.

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The bar chart details the percentage of internet users

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and the pie chart delineates

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Jul 19, 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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