The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main jeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts given represent information about the main study intentions among six dissimilar

age

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groups and the amount of

support

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received from recruiters.

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while

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the career aim of study decreases over

age

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, interest purposes increase over

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, the highest

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of employees is depicted in under 26

age

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group

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. to commence with,

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the greatest career intention portion can be seen in the under 26

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with 80% of pupils,

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some 65% in terms of employer

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furthermore

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, job purposes for Study regularly diminish by growing and reach the minimum of around 20% over 49

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, interest reason is at its lowest amount in the youngest

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with just 10%

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, and gradually increases by

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to its peak of 70% in over 49

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however

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, 26

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employees received the maximum

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of about 65% it fluctuates over

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and its lower figure is in 30-39

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group

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with roughly over 30%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, support, group, years with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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