A glance at the graph provided reveals a percentage of UK teenagers who followed a vegetarian diet between 1960 and 2020

A glance at the graph provided reveals a percentage of UK teenagers who followed a vegetarian diet between 1960 and 2020
Vegetarian diet A glance at the graph provided reveals a percentage of UK teenagers who followed a vegetarian diet between 1960 and 2020. The number of adolescents was volatilizing for these 60
years
and
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increased significantly from 1960 to 1980, and decreased
thereafter
for 20
years
.
Quantity
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of youths started rising in 1960 at 0 per cent and reached a peak in almost 20
years
with 16 per cent. Since
then
, it was a steep fall till 1991, followed by fluctuations until the 2000s. The percentage
was oscillating
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between 10 and 5 in the 1990s and stopped in the 2000s
according to
the line graphic. In the 2000s when fluctuations were stopped after reaching a percentage of 5, amount of vegetarians grew slightly for the next 10
years
. Since
then
, it maintained the same level for an identical period, at approximately 10
percent
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. There are numerous adolescents who follow a vegetarian diet in the United Kingdom,
on the contrary
, it is still surprising how the statistics can be changed in 60
years
reaching their own maximal and minimal points.
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