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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, amd planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, amd planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the industrial area of Norbition town that will be developed into
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 village in the future.
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, it can be seen that the
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future
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 development plan will be changed significantly. Many factories will be relocated into houses.
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, facilities will be constructed around households. Road and bridge will be
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constructed
 in the future, expand the areas of the road in the north and the west north of the main roundabout
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 the bridge will be added for across the river. Farmland will be moved to the east of the area and relocated by houses.
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, the factories of Norbiton town will be changed into housing in the future, some
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 will be added along the new road. There will be a lot of facilities in the new plan
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a playground
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, school and medical centre which is located to the east of the big roundabout.
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, shops will be built near the main roundabout.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • current condition
  • proposed future development
  • primarily
  • lining the roads
  • flowing from west to east
  • northern border
  • residential area
  • housing units
  • replace the factories
  • infrastructure
  • new bridge
  • connecting
  • creation of a park
  • expansion
  • community-friendly environment
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