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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the
export
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earnings
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 of somewhere exports in five categories during 2015 and 2016. The table illustrates the
percentage
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 change in each
export
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 category in 2016 compared with 2015.
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, the value of one country's exports in various categories both decreased during 2015 and 2016. The most
export
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earnings
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 are petroleum products, and the least
export
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earnings
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 are textiles both in 2015 and 2016. The
percentage
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 of germs and jewellery was declined and that of other categories was raised. The
export
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earnings
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 of petroleum products in 2015
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 almost 61 billion,
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 increased
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% in 2016. The
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earnings
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 of engineered
was
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increased 8.
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% compared to 2016,
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 was almost 58 billion in 2015. The
percentage
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 of germs and jewellery was nearly 43 billion. It's the only declining
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 in values that was 5. 18%. What's more, the
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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