The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart compares how many billions
does
one country exports in different product categories from 2015 to 2016.
Unnecessary verb
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It is clear that
the value of the
petroleum Correct article usage
apply
products
reaches a peak and that of the Textiles is minimal.
Both the
petroleum Correct article usage
apply
products
and the
Engineered goods Correct article usage
apply
are
tended to increase between 2015 to 2016 and the value of these peaked at a high of 62 Unnecessary verb
apply
billion
in 2016. There was a significant increase from 2015 to 2016 in the part of the Engineered goods.
After
this
, the Gems and jewellery decreased slightly during
2015 to 2016, which dropped from 43 Change preposition
from
billion
to 42 billion
.
In addition
, the value of the
agricultural Correct article usage
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products
and the
Textiles consisted Correct article usage
apply
the
Change preposition
of the
monority
of the category. Correct your spelling
minority
majority
TThe Agricultural
Correct your spelling
The agricultural
products
rose steadily, which arrived at 32 billion
in 2016. The
Textiles increased dramatically Correct article usage
apply
during
2015 to 2016,Change preposition
from
which started
at 26 Wrong verb form
starting
billion
and finally
reached
31 Wrong verb form
reaching
billion
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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