Write about the following topic: ‘Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Children
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offspring
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changed a lot in their behaviour
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which
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is impacting our society in a negative way in
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showing
respect to their
parents
.
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relevant
examples. The foremost main reason behind
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is
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in technology that made them
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in mobile phones,
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virtual
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and other electronic gadgets than spending
time
with their family. Before
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modern technology has ever been invented we all
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sufficient
time
to spend
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with our friends and families, but later we all addicted to
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modern
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and
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our
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children
also
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path.
For instance
,
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children
will only learn good manners if the
parents
teach them, but
parents
spend most of their
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mobiles and other electronic
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thinking that their
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offspring
will learn to respect their
parents
. The other reason may be getting easily exposed to different cultural behaviour that makes them
to
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forget about their own way of living and respecting their
parents
.
For instance
, If a
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children
child
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are sent
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to a international school where they meet and get introduced to
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different
culture student,
this
makes them
to
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learn
other
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about other
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culture
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cultures
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in
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at
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their
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small age and he/she grows with that knowledge
that
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made
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them
to
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not
respecting
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their
parents
.
Finally
, if
parents
teach their
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children
to respect their elders at
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a very
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small age they will not forget forever. In
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conclusion
, if we
parents
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parent
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forces
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force
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childern
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children
to spend more
time
with
thier
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their
families.
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grammar usage
Work on your grammar and punctuation. There are several grammar and spelling errors, for example, 'Childern', 'relevent', 'difffernt', and 'conclusin'. Proofreading your work will help you identify and correct these mistakes.
sentence structure
Try to make clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader. For example, 'The foremost main reason behind this is improve in technology that made them engaged in mobile phones, virual videogames and other electronic gadgets than spending time with their family.' could be more concise and clearer.
coherence cohesion
Provide more cohesive devices and linking words to improve the flow between your ideas. For instance, use phrases like 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', or 'However' to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
You clearly identified and discussed relevant problems related to the topic of children's respect for their parents.
task achievement
You provided specific examples to illustrate your points, such as the impact of modern technology and cultural exposure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respect authority
  • Generational shift
  • Democratic parenting
  • Authoritarian
  • Permissive approach
  • Technology influence
  • Media portrayal
  • Family bonds
  • Societal impact
  • Youth rebellion
  • Independence
  • Express opinions
  • Parental control
  • Economic demands
  • Traditional values
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