It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

The difference between right and wrong is certainly a topic that everyone should be familiar with, especially because we've been taught about
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or even infants.
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Every parent and or guardian probably has a different way of teaching
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concept to their children, but they most likely include punishments because it is crucial. Now the query is to what extent is
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even know how to talk properly yet, but, some parents might
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or young to
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who are always rebelling,
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we need to acknowledge that
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full of hormones and going through changes, it's normal for them to be like
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to punish them to the point where they'll resent us, but we
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of the day, they'
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just kids and they'
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and try to be better.
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Improve the logical flow by organizing ideas more clearly into separate paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea or argument to enhance clarity.
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Provide more specific examples or scenarios to illustrate your points about appropriate punishment and its impact. This will help in making the argument more relatable and convincing.
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The essay addresses the prompt effectively by discussing the importance of teaching children the difference between right and wrong and the role of punishment.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a solid framework for the argument.
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The writer acknowledges different perspectives on the use and extent of punishment, showing a balanced approach to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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