It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
I do agree with
this
statement where
children Correct word choice
that
needs
to be educated since they are young. When they are young, it's easier to Change the verb form
need
taught
them what is right and what is wrong. Change the verb
teach
However
, it is not that easy for us as adults
. That is
because children tends
to look at what Change the verb form
tend
adults
are doing, then
they will copy it. Even if we do something even though it's bad, they will Correct word choice
and then
also
copy it. Unless we told
them that it's not good and make sure that they won'Wrong verb form
tell
t
do it until they understand. But I would say this
method is more efficient compare
to speaking to children when they Change the form of the verb
compared
already
on teenage. Teenagers Add a missing verb
are already
tends
to think that they are already an adult. They can take care of their own. They don'Change the verb form
tend
t
need anybody
help. They already know Change noun form
anybody's
all thing
which makes them feel that they don'Correct your spelling
everything
t
need any advice from others. That is
the hardtime
for Correct your spelling
hard time
adults
as they will be in a long debate with the teenager until someone finally
relise
. Correct your spelling
realise
Although
, that would be hard to Correct word choice
However
accomplished
since Change the form of the verb
accomplish
teenager
are really Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers
stuborn
. Teenage would need to experience the consequences Correct your spelling
stubborn
first
,
before Remove the comma
apply
the
would be able to realise that they are wrong. Even if as Correct your spelling
they
adults
we tried
as best as we can to make sure that they won'Wrong verb form
try
t
experienced
it, it's hard to Change the verb form
experience
accomplished
it as Change the verb
accomplish
teenage
are stubborn. Correct your spelling
teenagers
Also
, because
humans will only learn from Correct word choice
apply
the
their mistakes Remove the article
apply
only
if they Rephrase
apply
had
Wrong verb form
have
experience
Wrong verb form
experienced
from
the Change preposition
apply
consequence
. Some of the punishment that they should Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
recieve
as a child Correct your spelling
receive
are
they are grounded and don'Change the verb form
is
t
go too soft to
them. Change preposition
on
While when
they are already Correct word choice
When
a
Correct article usage
apply
teenage
, we cannot really Correct your spelling
teenagers
grounded
them or control Verb problem
grind
as
Correct pronoun usage
them as
that is
the era where they always socialize with other people, also
, they start to go out more often than they used to be
. Unnecessary verb
apply
Therefore
, I think that the best punishment is to actually show them what to
actually happens if they do those things. Change preposition
apply
This
would help them reliase
the Correct your spelling
relieve
consequence
without actually experiencing Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
it
.Correct pronoun usage
them
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