The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.
The diagram gives information about
tea
harvesting with two different types of methods which are traditional and modern.
Overall
tea
manufacturing consists of 5 stages . At first
glance
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we can say that
firstly
the
tea
seedlings are picked on
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the condititon
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condititon
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condition
that the picked seedlings must have qualifications, after they are left to drying process on the plate and at
this
point
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the
tea
manufacturing are
seperating
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separating
modern and traditıonal methods .
According to
the traditional method the enzymes of
tea
are
was releasing
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released
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from leaves for oxıdatıon
while
the the
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apply
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the
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they
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turned
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into smidgen
particules
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particles
called fermantatıon. Aftermath the
tea
are
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is
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heated by oven or air
dryres
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dryers
dryer
in order to it can unleash flavour and aroma just as the
tea
are
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loses
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lossing
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losing
its moisture at a ratio %
97
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • withering
  • moisture content
  • pliable
  • rolling
  • twists
  • breaks up the cells
  • releasing enzymes
  • machine cutting
  • fermentation
  • oxidation
  • heating
  • drying and packaging
  • machinery
  • efficient
  • traditional methods
  • modern methods
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