The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.
The diagram gives information about
tea
harvesting with two different types of methods which are traditional and modern.
Overall
tea
manufacturing consists of 5 stages . At first glance
we can say that Add a comma
glance,
firstly
the tea
seedlings are picked on Correct article usage
the condititon
condititon
that the picked seedlings must have qualifications, after they are left to drying process on the plate and at Correct your spelling
condition
this
point
the Add a comma
point,
tea
manufacturing are seperating
modern and traditıonal methods . Correct your spelling
separating
According to
the traditional method the enzymes of tea
are was releasing
from leaves for oxıdatıon Wrong verb form
released
while
the the
Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct your spelling
they
turned
into smidgen Wrong verb form
turn
particules
called fermantatıon. Aftermath the Correct your spelling
particles
tea
are
heated by oven or air Change the verb form
is
dryres
in order to it can unleash flavour and aroma just as the Correct your spelling
dryers
dryer
tea
are
Wrong verb form
loses
lossing
its moisture at a ratio %Correct your spelling
losing
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