The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given data describes the motives behind visiting arts
events
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in the
last
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20
years
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in the UK.
Overall
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, the performers have been the main reason to attract audiences for 20
years
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,
while
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work has been the least popular reason for
such
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occasions.
Moreover
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, a downward trend is seen in those who go to arts
events
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to celebrate a special date. Twenty
years
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ago, a majority of visitors
of
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to
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recreational
events
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went to see some specific artists, recording 58%, which doubled the proportion of those who came for special occasions. Meanwhile, going with children or attending for business purposes marked the
least
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lowest
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percentage of attendees, ranging from 6 to 9%. Moving from there, the data on people going to see some performers plateaued at 55% and above until today.
Additionally
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, the figures for those who come accompanying their offspring rose from 9% to 15% in just 10
years
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and reached the highest point now at 24%.
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,
less
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fewer
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people chose to attend recreational
events
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for celebrations, as it
witnesses
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a
suddenly
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drop from 27% to 9% after 2 decades.
Lastly
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, business-related
motive
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motives
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rose slightly in the
last
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decade, from 6% to 10%, and
then
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levelled off there until today.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words events, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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