The diagram shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the Earth

The diagram shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the Earth
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the Earth
The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010. We can see
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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that in 1980 saturated attraction was
festival
Correct article usage
the festival
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. Exactly 30 %,
while
Linking Words
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
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occupied from 10% to 25%.
Festival
Correct article usage
The festival
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keep
Verb problem
remained
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constant between 1980 and 2010. The
art
Use synonyms
gallery’s prime was in 1985
year
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,
Use synonyms
art
Correct article usage
the art
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gallery dramatically increased in 5 years between 1980 and 1985 from 22% to about 36%. And
also
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fell dramatically in 5 years
on
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by
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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percent
Replace the word
percentage
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as
was
Verb problem
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before. In 2010
art
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gallery lost popularity. Petty changed has Pier from 1980 to 2005, fluctuated between 10% and 15%, but closer
2010
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to 2010
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year jumped over Pier.
Line
Correct article usage
The line
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graph
try
Correct subject-verb agreement
tries
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to show
,
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that Pavilion made a big leap, and saved
his
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its
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popularity, even in at the beginning wasn’t first. Always be like
pavilion
Correct article usage
a pavilion
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.
Overall
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, it can be said that
Festival
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the Festival
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kept stability popular.
Use synonyms
Art
Correct article usage
The art
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gallery even was at
prime
Correct pronoun usage
its prime
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didn't
last
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very long and fell like a sack
potatoes
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of potatoes
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. Pier
having
Punctuation problem
, having
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been downstairs, decided that
,
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he should be higher and stand in third place.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words art with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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