You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task.

This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries

from 1985 to 2005.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart illustrates the ratio of
women
who were employed in four countries during two decades from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the percentage of
women
employed in
US
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the US
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was
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at a
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a
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the
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highest point during
two
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the two
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decades. 
According to
what was shown in the chart, the rate of
women
employed in
Afgahnistan
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Afghanistan
was increasing
slight
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slightly
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from 1985 to 1995 about 5% .
Then
, it sharply dropped from 35% to 10% from 1995 to 2000. After that, it reached to lower point in 2005.
On the other hand
, in Korea, the ratio of
women
worker
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workers
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was rising
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rose
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slight
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slightly
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from 20% to 40% during two decades.
Moreover
, during1985 to 1990, the ratio of
women
employed in France went down around about 10%. After five years, it suddenly went up from 30% to 45%.
Then
, it increased again slowly to 50% in 2002 and it became the same level in 2005.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of women employed
  • employment trends
  • notable changes
  • significant increases and decreases
  • periods of stability
  • specific years and percentages
  • overall trend
  • compare and contrast
  • similarities and differences
  • throughout the period
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