You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart illustrates the ratio of
women
who were employed in four countries
during two decades from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the percentage of women
employed in US
wasCorrect article usage
the US
Change preposition
at a
a
highest point during Change the article
the
two
decades.
Correct article usage
the two
According to
what was shown in the chart, the rate of women
employed in Afgahnistan
was increasing Correct your spelling
Afghanistan
slight
from 1985 to 1995 about 5% . Change the word
slightly
Then
, it sharply dropped from 35% to 10% from 1995 to 2000. After that, it reached to lower point in 2005. On the other hand
, in Korea, the ratio of women
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
slight
from 20% to 40% during two decades.
Change the word
slightly
Moreover
, during1985 to 1990, the ratio of women
employed in France went down around about 10%. After five years, it suddenly went up from 30% to 45%. Then
, it increased again slowly to 50% in 2002 and it became the same level in 2005.Submitted by almeem on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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