Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Do the advantages of being self-employed outweigh the disadvantages?

There are trends of increase number of peoples being self-employed
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benefits on work-life balance, others concern the financial stability compared with employment by enterprise. From my point of view, there are more drawbacks to being self-employed than being employed by companies. On the one hand, Being self-employed can enhance work-life balance for
people
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People
can have a job with more flexible work hours rather than following work hours decided by the employer. The approach
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more suitable for
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heavy domestic duties
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. They can as temporary workers
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maintaining the balance of taking care
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family. To
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, self-employ allows
people
to have several jobs at the same time. There are
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can make portfolios
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the unique skills they have
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and available times. The customer can hide them as a contract with a particular task. On the other, there are more benefits and protection to being an employee of a
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. Apart from the salary they can earn, enterprises are regulated to provide healthcare insurance to their permanent or contract full-time employees.
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, companies may be more willing to invest in education resources
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As a result
,
people
have more opportunity to enhance their career development.
Moreover
, colleagues within the same company can form a Union to protect their rights. They can have annual meetings with employers to express their concerns on job-related issues
such
as hazardous working environments or underpaid salaries. To summarize,
although
being self-employed may benefit from increased flexibility, it did not overcome the disadvantages
such
as insurance provided by the company and bargaining power from the worker union.
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grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance clarity. For example, 'These approaches are more suitable for people who have heavy domestic duties, such as housewives.'
content
Elaborate on the benefits and drawbacks of self-employment vs. working for a company with more specific examples and analysis. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence
Ensure ideas flow logically between and within paragraphs. Consider using more transitional phrases to strengthen coherence. For instance, 'On the other hand,' could be followed by more specific contrasts to the earlier points.
content
Your essay effectively captures the core issues of the topic, discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of self-employment and working for a company, which aligns well with the task requirements.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are clear and align well with each other, effectively framing the main argument of the essay.
content
The use of specific terms like 'work-life balance,' 'healthcare insurance,' and 'bargaining power' makes the essay relevant and insightful.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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