The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart depicts the presentation of several
age
groups
of cinema visitors in a certain country
from
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between
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1978 and 2008.
Overall
, the ages between 14
until
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and
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over 50
years
have
similarity
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similarities
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which is the percentage was significantly decreased in 1988. In 2008, the ages started from 14 until 49
remain
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remained
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steadily and only
groups
of more than 50
years
that
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apply
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increase
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increased
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, in the same year. In 1978, a
group
of
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aged
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age
14
until
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to
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24 had
starting
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a starting
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point
at
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of
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90 per
cent
. But, decreased sharply around 79 per
cent
in 1988.
Then
, hit the same numbers by like in 1978 in
years
1998. Another
group
,
age
25 until 34 in 1978 had
lower
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a lower
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number than before
group
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the group
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, which was 80 per
cent
.
However
, they
also
experienced degradation in 1988 approximately 60 per
cent
. Move to other
groups
,
age
35 until 49 in 1978 got a total percentage
about
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of about
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60 per
cent
and dropped from time to time until
in
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apply
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1998.
Nevertheless
, rose up again in presentation.
Last
,
group
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the group
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of
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aged
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age
above 50
years
become
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became
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the
least
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lowest
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rank
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among other
groups
which
is
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was
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only 40 per
cent
in 1978. Surprisingly, in 2008 the line trend was up.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, years, group, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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