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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #growth #population #parts #world #prediction #future #summarise #features #comparisons
This
 line chart depicts
growth
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the growth
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 percentage in many different
part
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parts
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 of the
world
 at the definite time and
the
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in the
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 future . It is clear from the graph that , urban
people
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people's
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growth
are significantly increase
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are significantly increased
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by
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over
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the
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apply
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time
especially
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, especially
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 in Africa and Asia .
According to
 what is shown ,
by
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apply
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the 1950 minor ratio of
urban
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the urban
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population
was
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living in Africa and Asia
comparing
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compared
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 to the whole
world
 . but by
the
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apply
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2000 the
growth
 faced a massive increase , where about
the
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apply
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half of the
world
 was from urban people . The majority of Latin
American
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America
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 in 1950
was
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were
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 from urban
boold
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blood
 and through 50 years the
growth
 ratio
was
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apply
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still
in increase
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increased
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.
the predction
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The
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growth
 of
urban
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the urban
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population
 in
the
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apply
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2030 will not be highly far from
the
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apply
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2000 .
To sum up
 we could say that , the percentage
growth
 in Africa and Asia is slightly the same
comparing
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compared
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 to Latin America which
is have
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has
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 the largest ratio of urban people
growth
espically
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especially
at
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in
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 the past time . The
growth
 of
urban
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the urban
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population
predict
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predicted
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 to reach 60% of the
world
 by 2030 and it will be 80% of
Latin
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the Latin
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 American
population
 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • future predictions
  • historical data
  • urbanization trends
  • rates of growth
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • economic development
  • migration
  • government policies
  • upward trend
  • pace of urbanization
  • catching up
  • comparative analysis
  • regional differences
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