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The graph below shows the results of a survey on the percentage of people who drank soft drinks every day over 7 day period in 2019 in the 4 countries of the United Kingdom.

The graph below shows the results of a survey on the percentage of people who drank soft drinks every day over 7 day period in 2019 in the 4 countries of the United Kingdom.
The graph demonstrates the survey report which represents the proportion of cold beverage
consumers
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 on
daily
Correct article usage
a daily
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 basis for about a week in the UK for the year 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the survey was conducted among the citizens aged 15 and above. The people of almost all the nations of the United Kingdom
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drinks
Correct subject-verb agreement
drink
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 soft
drinks
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 every day.
However
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, the information about
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was not provided in the results. Belgium stood ahead of all the countries with about 20% of its population consuming sweetened
drinks
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on
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apply
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every single day of the week.
In contrast
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, the least was reported with Estonia which had hardly one-fourth of the drinkers in Belgium.
Moreover
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, about 12% of the
consumers
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 were listed in the countries namely, Malta, Germany, Hungary, Poland,
Bugaria
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Bulgaria
, Czechia,
Croatia
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and Croatia
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. Most of the countries including France, Austria, Portugal, Sweden, Denmark, and Ireland had less than 10% of the soft drink users
whereas
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 Spain,
Luxemberg
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Luxembourg
 and Italy
consumers
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 constitute just about 5%.
However
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, Greece, Romania, and Finland exhibited
lessthan
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less than
5
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a 5
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% contribution.
Furthermore
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, Norway managed to hold above 5%
beverage
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of beverage
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consumers
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.
Moreover
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, there were fluctuations in the consumption of soft
drinks
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 in
case
Correct article usage
the case
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 of the people of
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the
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EU.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumers, drinks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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