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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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data about the growth and development of urban
population
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populations
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 in
continents
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 involved
the
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 prediction of the future.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the highest rate for 4
continentsis
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continents
continents is
 the Latin
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American
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America
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in 2030 .
According to
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 what is
show
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 recently
the
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Larson
American
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the
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has the
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 highest average between the three
continents
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 by approximately 80% in 2030 . Compared with the lowest number of rate is it is Africa the percentage 10% in 1950 . On
one
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hand
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 the decrease rate between 4
continents
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 in 2000 is Latin
American
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 very large Majority. In 2000 both Africa and Asia
smaller
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had smaller
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 figures
the
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an
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 average
less
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then
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two
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 fifth . So it can be seen in
bar
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 chart in 1950
the
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both
continents
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sates
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states
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 the figures
pleauate
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please
 some time increases and same time decreases marked . In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the highest
averages
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average
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 in the
continents
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 is Latin
American
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 for both years .
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words continents, american with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • future predictions
  • historical data
  • urbanization trends
  • rates of growth
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • economic development
  • migration
  • government policies
  • upward trend
  • pace of urbanization
  • catching up
  • comparative analysis
  • regional differences
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