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The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.

The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the data for the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables
provides
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how these causes affected three regions of
world
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the world
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 during the 1990s
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it is clear that
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 the highest rate
deforestation
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of deforestation
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 and
over grazing
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overgrazing
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in Europe think that the population increased.
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 what can be shown recently the causes of land degradation by region is that
over grazing
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overgrazing
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 in two places America and Europe the percentage
35
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of 35
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%
while
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 the causes
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deforestation increased marked in both places think that effect increased population of people in different
canteries
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countries
centuries
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