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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.--DELETED LINK--

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.--DELETED LINK--
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The graph demonstrates the count of
books
 read by the male and female population at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the reading habit was increased among both the genders.
However
,
gents
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the gents
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 community read more
books
 than
their
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 opposite gender, which exhibited a downward trend over the course of time.
Initially
, in the year 2011, about 3000
books
 were studied by men
whereas
 their
number
was
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increased by 2000 in
case
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the case
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 of women. By the year 2012, males went through 4000
books
.
In
contrast
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 females verified double the
books
 read by men.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
books
 studied by both
the
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genders was
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increased
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 till 2013 and at that point
of
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 time, an identical
number
 of
books
 were studied by both of them which is about 10000.
However
, from the year 2013, the
number
 of
books
 read by females was diminished and
finally
 by 2014 they read about 7000
books
.
In contrast
, the
books
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number of books
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 read by males
were
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increased over time and
finally
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finally,
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 they read double the
number
 of
books
 studied by females.
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