The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
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pie charts indicate the percentage of
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the communitie's
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communitie's
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community's
expenditure
in a distinguished country which was spent on various staff in 1958 and 2008. It can be clearly seen that the highest amount of
money
was
spend
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on purchasing clothes in the past.
However
,
people
did not prefer to spend their wages on travel and transport over the period.(Which was the lowest proportion of
expenditure
over the period). In 1958,nearly a third of
population
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the population
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chose to spend their salary on clothing (%32) in a European country(which was the highest proportion of
spendig
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spending
over the whole year),compared to
amount
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the amount
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of
money
spent on clothes at %12 in 2008.
Moreover
,just under a quarter of
people
at %22 liked to purchase houses in 1958.Whilst,32 per cent of the communities tended to
spent
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their
money
on housing in 2008.
In addition
,precisely %18 of
people
were interested in spending their income on entertainment in 1958,just ahead of
people
who
prefered
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preferred
to spend their salary on entertainment at %16 in 2008.
In contrast
,a tiny fraction of
people
(%7) chose to spend their
money
on luxury goods in 1958,as opposed to
people
who were keen on spending wages on luxury goods at %17 in 2008.
Following
this
,the number of
people
who liked to spend their
money
on travel or
trasport
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transport
was %13 in 1958.
While
the percentage of
money
expenditure
on travel and transport was %6 in
a
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the
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country in 2008.(Which was the lowest amount of
expenditure
over the period).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, money, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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