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The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.

The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.
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The graph gives information about the consumption of unhealthy food in the UK each week in two decades in the 1970 and 1990. Overview
the
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The
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 chart demonstrates three meals
that
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apply
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namely
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, pizza and fish and chips
during
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from
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 1970 to 1990
it is clear that
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 a significant increase was the fish and chips
While
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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pizza decreased
in
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at
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 the end of
Correct article usage
the years
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years
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year
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 in the graph .
Gereally
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Generally
 speaking , in 1970 the green line was
in
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at
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 the top number after that it declined dramatically to reach the lowest point in the year 1985 after which upward in the
last
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 period.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
bule
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blue
 and red
lined
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lines
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 were
improvement
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improved
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 exactly in the beginning period
however
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 the red
lined
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lines
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was
Unnecessary verb
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increased sharply and
reach
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reached
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 to
highest
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the highest
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 point
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, in contrast,
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in contrast
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 the highest point of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 was under 500.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • dietary preferences
  • steady increase
  • significant drop
  • peak points
  • economic conditions
  • marketing strategies
  • health awareness
  • public health impact
  • cultural shifts
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