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With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#help #technology #students #information #support
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 decades there has been growing concern by specialists in education especially teachers and parents about the impact of
technology
 on improving the quality of learning, some people hold the idea that utilizing
technology
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 beneficial for
students
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some
 people believe that using
technology
 can not be helpful for
students
. As far as I am concerned I believe that nowadays
technology
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 a pivotal role
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 improving the quality and the number of information that children
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 plenty of private and
gouvernements shcolls
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government schools
 are utilizing
technology
 as computers for simulations and calculations of difficult
equaltions
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equations
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 which might be very helpful for
students
 in terms of time management.
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 the use of
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the internet
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internet
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 has been becoming important in research and
acquisition
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 of
informations
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information
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 in different fields .
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 the
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 technologies
allows
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 education nowadays anybody can study from his comfortable couch and
assist
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variety
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 of courses from international universities.
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 the use of
communications'
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 technologies helps
students
 to learn
others
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efficiency
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 language with native speakers from other countries. In
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 the use of
technology
 is imperative because it
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 a global trend and we have to
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 up
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it's obvious that the benefits of
technology
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Your essay includes a variety of points, such as the benefits of simulations, internet research, distant education, and communication technologies.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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