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The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France.

The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France.
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pie graph gives information about the production of electricity by
the
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 particular source that includes, coal, oil, natural gas, and hydropower in
both
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 countries namely, Australia and France and in the individual years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that was the most common consumer in
both
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 years. Meanwhile, was the least producer in
both
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 years. Some of the electricity production witnessed a drop
while
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 others a rise.
To begin
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 with, the highest source of production was coal, it stopped at 50
units
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 in 1980, and had a dramatic increase to 130
units
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 in 2000.
Moreover
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, the consumption of hydropower was
initially
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 20
units
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, and it had a noticeable rise in 2000 to 36
units
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.
On the other hand
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, consuming oil and natural gas experienced a significant decrease, at 10
units
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 and 20
units
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 respectively in 1980.
However
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, it declined significantly to 2
units
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 for
both
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 sources.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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