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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process of generating geothermal power is shown in the following diagram. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 the process begins with 5 main steps starting with collecting the
water
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 and passing it through several steps ending with generating the necessary electricity. it appears from the diagram that,
this
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 process is a mixture of natural and man-made
method
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. Diving deeper, the first step starts with gathering the cold
water
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 on the surface of the earth and transferring it through underground channels whose lengths are approximately 4.5 km. After that, the collected
water
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 is passed by hot rocks in the geothermal zone.
Then
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, the hot
water
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 is pumped up into a huge condenser.
The following step is
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 using the collected steam to turn the turbine around which generates the required electricity.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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