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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart given shows how the sale of hybrid vehicles worldwide varied between the 3-year period of 2006 and 2009.
Overall
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,
Japan
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 and the sum of other
countries
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 underwent an increase every year,
while
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 the US struggled to maintain a stable
sales
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 rate. During 2006, the electric vehicle
sales
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 in
Japan
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 and the total in other
countries
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 were similar, at nearly 50
thousand
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sales
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. The
sales
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 underwent a rise in 2007, with the
sales
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 in
Japan
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 reaching more than 50
thousand
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 and the total in other
countries
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 at almost 100
thousand
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. These numbers continued to rise in 2006, as
Japan
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 and the other
countries
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 achieved roughly the same amount of
sales
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 at 100
thousand
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. During 2008,
Japan
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's
sales
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 had a huge boost, increasing by approximately 240
thousand
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sales
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, equivalent to about 340
thousand
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sales
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; meanwhile,
sales
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 in other
countries
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 only rose an insignificant amount.
While
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 the number of
sales
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 in other
countries
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 significantly increased throughout the year, the US seemed to struggle. In 2006,
sales
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 in the US remained the highest in the three categories, with 250
thousand
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sales
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. By 2007,
this
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 number had increased by exactly 100
thousand
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sales
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.
However
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, in 2008 and 2009, the number of
sales
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 dropped, with only more than 300
thousand
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 in 2008 and less than 300
thousand
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 in 2009.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, countries, sales, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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