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The table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table and pie
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the data and the total value and
sources
 of
fish
 imports to the UK
during
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from
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the
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apply
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1990 to 2000.
Averall
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Overall
it is clear that
 during
the
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apply
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1988
the
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Canada
highest
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had highest
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 the percentage of
sources
 of
fish
 crucial to the US .
According to
 what can be shown recently
the
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apply
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Canada increased of
sources
 of
fish
 by approximately 60% . During
the
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apply
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1988
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apply
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While
 ,
in
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apply
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the 2000 decreased rate of
sources
fish
 in the Canada 28
percent
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per cent
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 on the one
hands
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hand
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the
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apply
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china
has
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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 average is
sources
fish
 in 1988 think that
rose
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the rose
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of
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in
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 tax in
this
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these
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canteries
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centuries
countries
canneries
 during 2000
increases
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increased
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 marked respectively percentage of resources
is
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apply
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30
whereas
, during 2000 rose of total value
in
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of
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 billions of dollars by approximately 10,72
fathermore
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furthermore
 1988 the figures middle . the total value and
sources
 of
fish
 imports to the UK during
this
 period . The figures change dermatic and
domnstarate
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demonstrate
 decreased and increased.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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