The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the
amount
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of criminal cases recorded between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales, the crimes were categorized into car theft, house burgling, and street robbery.
Overall
, three types of crimes demonstrated an increasing trend.
According to
the chart, the most prominent change was the
number
of car thefts, which surged from 0.40 million in 1970 to 1.00 million in 2005. The
number
climbed slowly between 1970 and 1990,
however
, it skyrocketed from 1.00 to 1.60 in 1995. After that, a drop could
been
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seen in 2000 and 2005,
finally
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finally,
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the
number
dipped to 1.00 in 2005.
On the other hand
, the
number
of house
burglings
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burglars
and street robberies
were
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really different from the
number
of car thefts, they only increased by a small
number
. For house
burgling
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burglary
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, the
number
was 0.20 in 1970,
then
it soared to 0.90 in 1980,
after
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and after
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that, it
drop
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dropped
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to 0.60 in 1985. After that, a bounce could be seen between 1985 and 2000.
Finally
, it dropped to 0.50 in 2005. As for street robbery, it climbed
with
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at
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a slightly slow speed, which increased from 0.10 in 1970 to 0.40 in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • rate
  • significant
  • incidence
  • decline
  • increase
  • statistics
  • data
  • crime rate
  • comparison
  • period
  • variations
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