The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts the
amount
of criminal cases recorded between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales, the crimes were categorized into car theft, house burgling, and street robbery. Change the quantifier
number
Overall
, three types of crimes demonstrated an increasing trend.
According to
the chart, the most prominent change was the number
of car thefts, which surged from 0.40 million in 1970 to 1.00 million in 2005. The number
climbed slowly between 1970 and 1990, however
, it skyrocketed from 1.00 to 1.60 in 1995. After that, a drop could been
seen in 2000 and 2005, Change the verb form
be
finally
the Add a comma
finally,
number
dipped to 1.00 in 2005.
On the other hand
, the number
of house burglings
and street robberies Correct your spelling
burglars
were
really different from the Change the verb form
was
number
of car thefts, they only increased by a small number
. For house burgling
, the Replace the word
burglary
number
was 0.20 in 1970, then
it soared to 0.90 in 1980, after
that, it Correct word choice
and after
drop
to 0.60 in 1985. After that, a bounce could be seen between 1985 and 2000. Wrong verb form
dropped
Finally
, it dropped to 0.50 in 2005. As for street robbery, it climbed with
a slightly slow speed, which increased from 0.10 in 1970 to 0.40 in 2005.Change preposition
at
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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