The graph below shows the percentage of part- time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the percentage of part-time employees in four different countries of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

Overall

, the proportion of

part–time

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part-time

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workers in three of the countries which

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are

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England, Northern Ireland and Wales in 1980 is greater than that in 2010. It can be seen that Scotland is the only

county

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country

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in the United Kingdom which has a higher number of part-time workers in 2010.

Firstly

, Northern Ireland suffered a slight decrease in the

people

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number of people

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working part-time as the percentage dropped from about 15% in 1980 to 13% in 2010. England

has

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a percentage of part-time employees of over 20% in 1980.

Whereas

in 2010, it

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was

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approximately 31%. It is noticeable that the number of part-time workers increased in 31years.

Similarly

, in both Scotland and Wales, there are more people working as a part-time employee in 1980 compared to 2010.

However

, Scotland experienced a relatively dramatic increase of 8

percent

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per cent

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point

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than that of Wales which is 3

percent

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per cent

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point.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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Suitable writing tone

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The graph below shows the percentage of part- time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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