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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the number of international attendances
in
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at
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universities
of
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in
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 a
European
 nation. It can be seen that
China
 and America both hold the most significant
figure
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figures
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.
Moreover
, the tiniest statistic belonged to
Russia
. In 2004, there were around 27000 Chinese students who
apply
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applied
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for
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to
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universities
 in a
European
 country
while
 the
figure
 for Russian was 2500. Plus, there were roughly 13000
applicants
 from
USA
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the USA
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 which is 6000 bigger than it
from
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is from
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Japan
. In the next year,
applicants
 from
China
decrease
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decreased
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 to 23000 which is 8000 higher than
it
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those
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 from the US. Meanwhile, the
figure
 for
Russia
 was 2000 and
Japan
 remained stable.in 2006, there was
a
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apply
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equality in
participations
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participation
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 in
universities
 of one
European
 nation from
China
 and
USA
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the USA
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 (around 17000). There were 2500 Russian students who
attend
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attended
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to
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apply
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universities
 which is 4500
lesser
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less
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 than
Japan
. In the next year,
in
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apply
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a
European
 nation witnessed 23000
applicants
 from the US to the
universities
 which is 4000 huger
then
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than
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China
while
 participants for
Russia
 were around 2000.
Additonally
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Additionally
, there were nearly 10000
Japannese
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Japanese
 students who
go
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went
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 to
universities
of
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in
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 one
European
 area. In the year after, the number of
applicants
 from the US was 27000 which is one of the highest
figure
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figures
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 in the chart
while
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the statistic
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statistic
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statistics
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of
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for
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China
was
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were
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 slightly higher than 15000.
In addition
, there were 2700 attendances from
Russia
 which is 7300 smaller than
Japan
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities, european, china, figure, russia, applicants, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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