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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a certain country that had Internet access between 2011 and 2016, Summarize' the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a certain country that had Internet access between 2011 and 2016, Summarize' the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#percentage #households #country #internet #access #information #features #comparisons
As can be seen, the given bar chart
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shows
showes
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shows
 information about
the
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internet
access
 in two types of households (
surban
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urban
/urban and rural) between 2011 and 2016
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overall
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, we can notice that
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internet
access
had
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 increased in both urban/suburban and rural households.
Also
, the
percentage
 of
internet
access
 in urban /suburban families was higher than that in rural families during the years shown on the graph. In 2011, only 5
percent
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 of Rural households had
internet
access
while
 it was around 15 per cent in the urban/urban in the same year. by the next year, the
percentage
 increased in both areas, but it doubled to 30
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 in the urban /suburban areas
while
 it was around 7
percen
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per cent
 in the rural. From 2013 to 2016 the
percentage
 kept increasing. The
percentage
 in urban/suburban areas remained steady at close to
to
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55 per cent. At the same
time
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the
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internet
access
 in rural homes reached 35
percent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, access, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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