The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The percentage of renewable
energy
in total
Correct article usage
the total
energy
supply from 4 regions is depicted in the bar chart from 1997 until 2010.
In 1997, Australia showed a low proportion in
Change preposition
of
their
eco-friendly Correct pronoun usage
apply
energy
which was about 10 tons
. This
also
happened in Sweden with was
showed the smallest percentage. Both countries had been showing insignificant improvement in Verb problem
which
comparing
to other countries. Replace the word
comparison
While
Australia
Change noun form
Australia's
energy
supply decrease
slightly Wrong verb form
decreased
year
by year
, those in Sweden rose up
delicately which was approximately 5 and 9 Change preposition
apply
tons
respectively.
On the other hand
, other northside country
Change the wording
another northside country
other northside countries
such
as Iceland pictured a good improvement to utilize
their renewable Change preposition
in utilizing
energy
which brought this
region to have the highest proportion of supply energy
among others which was about 50-70 tons
all over the year
given. Turkey the country between Asia and Europe has benefit
from their location Change the verb form
benefited
due to
the fossil fuel. However
, this
country also
showed a proper percentage of their renewable energy
supply which was about 37-40 tons
in 1997 and 2000 even though the number fell down
to 35 in the Change preposition
apply
last
year
. This
situation showed that Icelanded
Correct your spelling
Iceland
as well as
Turkey have been showing a good commitment in
eco-friendly Change preposition
to
energy
purpose
.Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
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