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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the amount of electricity
production
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 and
consumption
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 for the top ten
countries
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 in
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that China consumed and produced more electrical
energy
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 compared to other
countries
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, and the least number provided by Korea and Rep.
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, many
countries
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 produced more
energy
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 than they consumed in 2014. With 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 of
production
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 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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 of
consumption
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, China placed at the top in 2014, and the United States was
second,
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with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 of electrical power
production
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 and 3,866
billion
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kWh
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 of
consumption
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. Korea and Rep were placed
at the end
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, with only 485.1
billion
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 of
production
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 and 449.5
billion
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 of consuming electrical
energy
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. Russia produced 1,057
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014 and placed
third,
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and its
energy
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consumption
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 was close to its
production
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. The amount of
energy
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 produced by Canada, India Japan was between 600 and 940
billion
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kWh
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, and their electrical power
consumption
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 was approximately 100
billion
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kWh
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 lower than their
production
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. For France, Brazil, and Germany, both electrical
energy
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 usage and
production
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 were between 520 and 561
billion
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kWh
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. It is worth mentioning that except for Germany, all
countries
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 produced more
energy
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 than they consumed.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, countries, billion, kwh, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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