The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.
The
given
pie charts provided data about the types of Verb problem
apply
energy
manufactured in France in 1995 and 2005.
As observed, coal and gas were the most produced energies, Use synonyms
while
the value of production of nuclear and others was the minority.
In 1995, both figures for gas and coal were almost 30% with a difference of less than 1 percentage, which made them the most popular Linking Words
energy
products. After that, the trend did not change much in 2005, the amount of Use synonyms
coal’s
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coal
manufacture
still slightly overtook gas, but by 31 % compared to the trend of 1995.
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manufactured
Moreover
, nuclear manufacture of nuclear Linking Words
energy
was the second least viral Use synonyms
energy
with Use synonyms
production
of more than one and Add an article
the production
a production
half
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a half
percent
with comparison to figures for other types of Change the spelling
per cent
energy
that was the least widely produced Use synonyms
energy
in 1995. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Although
, the decade after, both values grew half as much as Correct word choice
However
initially
, Linking Words
while
the former outdid the latter by 1 per cent.Linking Words
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