The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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Line chart depicts the proportion of Australian exports to four nations between 1990 and 2012. It is clear from the graph that,
United
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States ,
Japan
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and Japan
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represent approximately the same rates during these years
whereas
India
and
China
start with
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around
the same pattern at the
beggining
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beginning
then
China
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rates
get rised
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rose
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and
India
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figures declined.
According to
what is shown, in 1990 Japan
reach
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reached
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27 % of
exports
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rate
then
it had a drip with 20% in 1995, the next years we can see the percentages around the same in other
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US
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the US
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start
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with about 12%
percent
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per cent
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at
first
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year
then
droped
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dropped
slightly with 4% after that it has
grew
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again as the same at first
then
it has plunged gradually .
Also
,
India
has the most
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minor
percentages at
first
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time with about 1%
then
it gradually
rised
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raised
rise
rose
with
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to
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about 8%
then
slightly
driped
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dripped
dried
at
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in
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2012 with around 6%.
Furthermore
,
China
has the most significant numbers during
this
period starting with
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a minor
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ratio
about
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of about
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2% which
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near to
India
then
it has a massive
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as we can see
in
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last
year it
has
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30% which is the major.
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we could say that, The Australian exports proportion to Japan,
China
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the
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most modest
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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